Wie helpt mij een betere Invitation email te schrijven?
Invitation!
Your friend, [naam van de inviter], has invited you to join the amazing and beautiful world of model- and fashion photography at http://www.bodynsoulmodels.com.
To become a member of bodysnoulmodels, click the link below or paste it into the address bar of your browser.
[hier is dan de link om te klikken]
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bodynsoulmodels is a website for Surinamese people who are in one way or the other involved with model- and fashion photography. Photographers, Models (experienced, starting or curious), Make-up artists, Designers, Hair stylists, Wardrobe stylists etc are all welcome.
Registration is free. You can upload up to 20 images in your portfolio, make appointments for shoots, discuss the industry or ask questions in the forums. Also view the portfolio's and user profiles of other models, photographers and other registered members, send to and receive private messages from members, place casting calls for shoots and a lot more.
Some functions can only be accessed when you are registered and logged in!!
Hurry up, this invitation expires in 60 days!!
Join!!
bodynsoulmodels
http://www.bodynsoulmodels.com/
Hartelijk bedankt CONNYP,
je bent echt geweldig, ik heb de invitation mail direct aangepast, aangezien jou versie echt 10 keer beter was dan de mijne. Hmmmm, die lessen reclame schrijven zijn inderdaad niet aan jou vergooit!!! Ik wil wedden dat je tijdens die les geen foto's van de palmentuin maakte.
;)
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Site Administrator
bodyNsoulModels.com
De tekst van de invitation email moet dringend aangepast worden. Het voldoet niet en komt nog uit de eerste dagen dat ik de website aan het uitproberen was. Wie helpt mij de tekst verbeteren? Je hoeft niet perse Marketing en Communicatie te studeren, maar het helpt ongetwijfeld ;) Plaats je suggesties hieronder in een comment!!
De huidige tekst van de invitation email is:
Invitation!
Your friend, [naam van de inviter], has invited you to join bodynsoulmodels at http://www.bodynsoulmodels.com.
To become a member of bodysnoulmodels, click the link below or paste it into the address bar of your browser.
[hier is dan de link om te klikken]
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bodynsoulmodels is a website for Surinamese people who are in one way or the other related to modelling photography. Photographers, Models (experienced or starting or curious), Make-up artists, Designers, Hair stylists, Wardrobe stylists etc.
Registration is free, you can upload up to 20 images in your portfolio, make appointments for shoots, discuss the industry or ask questions to your colleagues in the forums, view the portfolio's and user profiles of other models, photographers and other registered members, send private messages to other members, place casting calls for shoots and a lot more.
Some functions can only be accessed when you are registered and logged in!!
Hurry up, this invitation expires in 60 days!!
Join!!
bodynsoulmodels
http://www.bodynsoulmodels.com/
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